Are all of the Bliss weapons supposed to be magical because they deal extra damage in Bliss? Whether yes or no, there is inconsistency on which weapons are listed as magical versus non-magical.
Crown of Expertise "... do not have a checkbox ..." instead of "... to not ..."
Dust of Disappearance, add "do" in front of "pretty" or similar change in wording.
Dust of Distraction - does it need to specify that it just affects the one room (not permanent +2 AC)?
FoP: Imp, "... used against ..." not "... used by ..."
Gauntlets of the Midguard Serpent, add "... time ..." to when the wearer hits.
Gloves of Linked Fury. Don't believe they are Gloves of Linked Fury but vaguely recall Berserker Fury or something.
Hellbane Cloak - "self-targeting" is not obvious in meaning. Should it be "When using a healing spell/power on another that does not heal you, ..."
Horn of the Blessed Ox has similar awkward wording on self versus others.
Lenses of Heimdall Sight, can't it just be simplified to say "invisible creatures"?
Lotus Blossom Bowls, superfluous language on who it affects.
Masterwork Thieves' Tools. Misspelled "usable". Awkward wording on having multiple copies of the token. Can't just say "Only one MTT can be used per adventure no matter how many the thief owns."?
Medallion of Energy, "wearer" not "wearers", can be rewritten to avoid "they" problem.
Necklace of the Norns, see MoE.
Potion Brawn, is that the actual name? Should it say until end of room?
Raider's Shirt, "maximum" because it's not a usual AC slot? Just seems confusing or unnecessary.
Ring of the EEl, "... as Shock"? Couldn't it just say "... +3 Shock Damage ..."
Scroll Comprehend Languages, self-only and can't target others kind of means the same thing or one includes the other.
Scroll Loki's Blessing, "worm" is probably "room".
Thor's +5, add any explanation of what Returning means?